tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post3542785805784136789..comments2023-11-05T03:14:05.900-05:00Comments on The Blutonian Death Egg: The Thing About AdverbsRusty Carlhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09887821877521181811noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-87723446388065134032011-07-23T03:51:01.801-04:002011-07-23T03:51:01.801-04:00that was too clever Andrew. what are you hiding?that was too clever Andrew. what are you hiding?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-50107075592599725682011-07-18T22:02:53.637-04:002011-07-18T22:02:53.637-04:00I really think the main issue with adverbs is that...I really think the main issue with adverbs is that it really breaks down into 90% of adverb usage being two very often used words: very and really. It's a very, very bad problem, and people should really learn to use other words. Verily.Andrewhttp://strangepegs.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-50469855910010086612011-07-18T13:22:52.206-04:002011-07-18T13:22:52.206-04:00And I have an awesome critique partner who pounces...And I have an awesome critique partner who pounces on adverbs like a hawk! (And it's not a pretty sight.)Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-81908553829780432342011-07-18T11:56:28.045-04:002011-07-18T11:56:28.045-04:00I have an awesome editor who picks up my over used...I have an awesome editor who picks up my over used words and we take out pretty much all that we can while leaving the meaning of the text intact. Mine is action adventure so I need to keep sentences shorter and forget about many of the adverbs.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-54490633511428191622011-07-18T11:23:28.077-04:002011-07-18T11:23:28.077-04:00Brevity is the soul of wit.Brevity is the soul of wit.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-27834434171268912802011-07-18T11:02:57.921-04:002011-07-18T11:02:57.921-04:00I see your point. I don't care for plaintivel...I see your point. I don't care for plaintively as an adverb. It has me saying, "what the heck was that kid doing?" That was very nice how you expanded it into two sentences. I would much rather read that than the first. :)Laila Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430076999393883312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-19547924138672624772011-07-18T10:55:28.258-04:002011-07-18T10:55:28.258-04:00Although overuse of adverbs waters down the writin...Although overuse of adverbs waters down the writing, sometimes they can be used!! And as for your plaintively sentence, that's the one that intrigued me the most. Because I'm thinking, what's wrong with Jimmy? Who is Jimmy? Why is he sad and running at the same time? But the other sentences were about some action that happened or was about to happen and I really didn't care. I cared more about plaintive little Jimmy.Karen Jones Gowenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01153821980625034810noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-22386143679119578102011-07-18T01:38:32.533-04:002011-07-18T01:38:32.533-04:00Great example. I never understood why people hated...Great example. I never understood why people hated them. 'Plaintively' is a poor choice in the sentence, because it's difficult to comprehend. I mean, how exactly does one run plaintively?Deborah Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10120928766455872439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-80222408114289753102011-07-17T23:33:17.456-04:002011-07-17T23:33:17.456-04:00How about:
'Jimmy tore down the hallway, his...How about: <br /><br />'Jimmy tore down the hallway, his arms and legs pistons in a revving engine. He blinked back tears and tried not to think about what would happen if he was too late.'<br /><br />Screw the right adverb. If it presents itself, aces. If it ain't there, try another trick in the goodie bag, Felix.<br /><br />Super-cool-guy post. I like.Suzehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908805179119217608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-1424519249984607432011-07-17T23:22:03.961-04:002011-07-17T23:22:03.961-04:00Good point, although if we're trying to get so...Good point, although if we're trying to get something nuanced across then one isn't enough. But in principal, I agree.Rusty Carlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09887821877521181811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4966405019276327514.post-9034973709846259952011-07-17T23:11:44.825-04:002011-07-17T23:11:44.825-04:00Sure you can use 10 words when one will do. Somet...Sure you can use 10 words when one will do. Sometimes it's better to just say that he ran down the hallway.PT Dillowayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09394481476862013009noreply@blogger.com