From my super old WIP, and the novel for which this blog is named, The Blutonian Death Egg:
“What’s wrong now?” I asked, slamming my book shut and tossing it onto my desk.
Josh paced from one side of the room to the other a few times before responding. “The school sent a note to Granny, told her that I’m going to be sent to a school for problem kids.”
“They said that?”
Josh nodded, “I got caught with Mr. Patterson’s missing billfold and a bag of weed.” I think I’m done for.”
My eyes went wide, “Weed?” Does Granny know?”
And there you have it. I think that was seven sentences. Hard to believe from that excerpt that it's sci fi, but it was a random passage. Every sentence can't have flubodium or cheetah robots.
You know what, just because I'm tired, I figured I throw in a bonus piece... from the same portion of last fall's unnamed nano novel. This one is a fantasy:
Jeb opened up the door and saw a workbench to his left, there was a bloody surgical tool next to Lem’s bag. It was dark inside and he couldn’t make out anything further due to the darkness. He heard shuffling.
“Lem?” It’s me, Jeb. Are you in there?”
Lem stepped out of the shadows and into the light shining in from the open barn door. He had blood on his hands, his clothes, even his face.
Lookie there, twice what you asked for.... wait, if you asked for nothing then it's probably closer to three times. Anyhow, I do enjoy talking about my own stuff, you'd think I'd do it more often.
And I appreciate Briane tagging me. I think I'll fall back on the old, "if you want to be tagged, then please consider it done, don't make me call you out," defense.
14 comments:
Interesting lines, got me curious now...
I definitely recognize the first one! Still an awesome story.
Is there any writer who doesn't love talking about their own stuff? LOL.
Both good scenes.
More flubodium!
And what's a guy gotta do to get a couple of cheetah robots in every scene?
I was going to simply comment by saying 'Wookies!' But that's kind of your thing, and I don't want to steal it until I run out of things I stole from Michael Offutt.
That second excerpt is really quite good. I think the real test of this meme (?) Is to see if seven lines of your story, chosen essentially at random, are compelling. Your 'Chronicles of Flubodium' passes that test.
Does granny know indeed? She probably smokes it too.
Wait! Why -aren't- there any wookies? At least some Mayhews or something. >disgruntled<
I like them both, but the first one actually interests me more. For some reason, the blood doesn't provoke any questions for me.
I think they're both interesting. The second one seems more urgent with all the blood. Good stuff.
How did you have such great "sevens'? I fear that I'm going to have a boring selection when I respond to my lucky tagging.
Very nice, Rusty. I hope we get to read more of these works of yours soon.
It's interesting to visit all the blogs and read people's excerpts; yours were very intriguing!
Granny, haha - cute!
The second excerpt sounds creepy... ;)
I love the voice in the first one especially. I was already sitting in the room waiting to see what happened nest.
I totally want to meet Granny!
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