Friday, August 10, 2012

When the World is Broken

I've started tinkering with a new short story. I don't know why, but I got a quite a kick out my concept. I thought I'd share a first draft excerpt.

It's a story of a cosmic entity that is cast down and forced to live as a human child.


"The indignities Billy suffered were beneath him. How could he hope to rule the cosmos again when he had runny bowels thanks to the undercooked meat in his burrito? The universe was determined to undermine him.

And so the universe would pay.

And the playground was the worst. The older kids didn’t respect his authority. They made him eat worms, or pulled his pants down, or worse. But they couldn’t break him. He wouldn’t cry, or complain, or tell, he would take their worst, and smile through it all – dreaming of the day that he would shove mud down their pants. Well, his minions would shove mud down their pants. The effect would be the same though.

And such was his life. A god trapped in the body of a child."

Happy Friday.

12 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Still caught up in that bad food day of yours, I can tell!

Brinda said...

I can see that somebody's gonna pay later in this story. Poor Billy.

PT Dilloway, Superhero Author said...

It's kind of like "Small Gods" by Terry Pratchett only in that the god was in the body of a turtle.

vic caswell (aspiring-x) said...

heeheehee... somehow, i believe this is the same way stormageddon, the dark prince, sees the world...

Rusty Webb said...

Dammit

Michael Offutt, Tebow Cult Initiate said...

It reminds me of that song, "What if God were one of us? Just a slob like one of us...just a stranger on the bus...tryin' to make his way home..."

Andrew Leon said...

AH! So much potential! Like, even, what if he was delusional and just thought he was a god?

Have you seen Invader Zim? You should watch Invader Zim.

And, now, I'm going to sing the Doom song...

M Pax said...

lol I like it. Reminds me of a story a local friend of mine is writing. Good stuf.

Jo said...

Sounds like it has potential to me.

Jo said...

Sounds like it has potential to me.

The Golden Eagle said...

Interesting excerpt! I wonder what he'll be like as he physically becomes an older human--assuming he stays in the body for that long.

Donna Hole said...

At least it is something to work on. A good concept; making the universe pay.

BTW: I finished the manuscript, started an e-mail to you, then got distracted for a couple days.

Seriously, I'll go finish the final touches of the overall comments and send it to you.

And yes, I did enjoy the book - especially part two. Wow, was that totally freaking awesome!

........dhole