Wednesday, March 23, 2011

A Crusader Challenge I Can Handle

Anyone who was paying attention noticed that I completely ignored the first Crusader challenge. Well, this time, I'm all over it. I mean, how hard can it be to write a hundred word flash fiction piece that starts with the phrase, "The goldfish bowl teetered". Please, half of my sentences in everyday life start with that phrase.

Ahem, just in case you need the official rules.


"The goldfish bowl teetered that it needs more food," Jane said.

I shook my head. "That doesn't make any sense at all. Are you sure?"

She shrugged. “Look.” She held  up her phone for me to inspect.

“Tweeted!” I shouted after looking at her phone.

“Whatever, it ‘tweeted’ it then.”

I stifled a grin, my Grandmother’s roommate was easily confused by technology. I struggled to find a way to break it to her. “I set your calendar to push a message to you today to remind you to pick up some fish food.”

“Yes dear,” she said, “You mean tweeted.”

And that's it folks. Hope everyone is having a good week.


22 comments:

Trisha said...

LOL this is a really cute little story - I love the idea of someone's grandma having a roommate. LOL. And that's just the sort of thing my mum would get wrong, let alone my grandma ;)

Wannabe Writer said...

Too funny. Feed those goldfishes!

Rogue Mutt said...

Yeah, this wasn't much of a "challenge" really. Flash fiction is easy.

Summer Ross said...

LOL- really cute story- love the mix up of words.

Sierra Gardner said...

This is pretty cute! My favorite is when people say 'the twitter.' Makes me laugh each time.

Happily Cheesy said...

Cute.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Teetered instead of Twittered - nice twist!

Sylvia van Bruggen said...

that sounds like something I could say! Notorious for mixing words up :)

Love the lil twist!

Cherie Reich said...

I like this. Very cute! :)

Carol Riggs said...

Nice techy take on the Challenge, and nice dialogue! Good job. :)

Michelle Merrill said...

Teetered and tweeted. Love the mix-up. Good job!

A Beer for the Shower said...

I can appreciate the cleverness and think this turned out really well. I've never tried my hand at flash fiction, but I bet it'd be quite fun. Something about squeezing an entire story into 100 words. Not many people can pull it off.

Cally Jackson said...

Hahaha! Very cute. :-)

Witless Exposition said...

Cute! Love the way you used the prompt. Definitely the most creative use of it. :)

Jeanne said...

Clever to take the prompt and deliberately have it misunderstood in the story. Very different take and I enjoyed the humor in this. Great job.

Nancy said...

nice job of characterization with few words and an admirable rise to the challenge.

Charity Bradford said...

LOL, this was great!

Alison Miller said...

I love this! I would've never thought of this angle. Great job!

Deniz Bevan said...

Love it! Teetered instead of tweeted, that's sp funny - and believable!

Kerri Cuev said...

Lol that was cute, great job!

Tara said...

Cute. Nice take.

Kari Marie said...

This was really fun! Great entry.